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When I was little, my dad was a superlative.

He was the strongest, the bravest, the most the best. No man could compete with him. He didn't just set the bar, no, my dad was the bar. He could do no wrong in my big youthful eyes.

When I became a teenager, my dad was nothing but wrong.
His expectations: wrong.
Means of discipline: wrong.
Opinions of my boyfriends: wrong.
And it was hard to understand how a man of such great stature could take such a fall. Especially to such a smart daughter like me, who was above the petty "ugh, my parents suck!" complaints of a typical teen. I, who searched for a higher understanding, could not possibly be at fault.

I'm older now. Still a teen, legally an adult, mentally going back and forth between the two.
But I understand now. I really, honestly understand; not the way I understood when I was younger, no, this is genuine understanding.

Everything my dad has done has been the result of nothing but love. My dad wants nothing but the best for us and all he expects is the same in return. I realize now I was at fault for not giving that, the most honest excuse I have being laziness. I picture him, looking at the first life he helped create, knowing statistics were against him and fighting them anyway. It seems the least I could do to show my appreciation is give everything I do my all. The man has done more than earned earned it.

My dad hurts, my dad laughs, my dad cries (don't tell him I told you that though). My dad is human.

My dad may be great, but I no longer see him as a superlative.

My dad may make mistakes, but I no longer see him as wrong.

I see him as something with, I think, much more meaning and worth than that.

I see him as mine.
Okay, if you guys lie and kiss my ass for every other deviation I post on here only to talk crap behind my back, DON'T LIE TO ME ABOUT THIS I really wanted to write something for my dad this father's day since idk, I guess I have some talent for it or something. That's what the internet people say anyway...

I need feedback and suggestions for improvements if you have any. Any at all. Don't worry about offending me. Conversely if you think it's fine, say that. But please mean it with all your heart and soul.
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:iconhapaforever:
HapaForever Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2013  Student General Artist
I really don't have anything bad to say about it. I think it's great. It is so honest and true.
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:iconkushamisaru:
kushamisaru Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!

He loved it too btw :D
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:iconhapaforever:
HapaForever Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2013  Student General Artist
You're welcome! And that's great!
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justdeva Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2013
i like it
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:iconkushamisaru:
kushamisaru Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you!
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whatthehellhappend Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
DAWWWWWWWWW!!!!!!!! <3
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kushamisaru Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:bow:
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whatthehellhappend Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:iconimhappyplz:
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IzzyLuvsYou22 Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This is super touching D:. I love my father with all my heart and I too understand that everything he does and says is his way of showing he loves us. My dad wasn't raised in the best of ways, he wasn't shown love by his parents. None what-so-ever, his grandmother showed him love and discipline and made him who he is today, which is a loving father who does have anger issues, who does have trouble showing his playful side and who does try his hardest to keep us alive.

This is a very sweet deviation and it almost made me cry D:. I love it :)
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kushamisaru Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Aww, well it wasn't my intention to make anyone nearly cry, but I'm glad you found it so moving!

And I'm glad your dad had your great granother to show him love and that he gives it in return. Not everyone can be that strong :)
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IzzyLuvsYou22 Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Yeah :)
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SilverFickle Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Personally.
It's a bit overdone, its practically everywhere and people only seem to give more gratitude to them on Fathers' day o-o I'll just let that slide.

SO, i feel like its a bit left hanging? like it's not done.
Love the first line. SRSLY <3 Pschooooo (this is me being blown away)
Love the meaning at the end, but i still feel like there's a line hidden. cant quite put my finger on it.
Like the small hint of humor :woohoo:
But i feel you, i hate my dad i love my dad SIGH.
I dont kiss your arse, i like the gist of it but the idea is everywhere. :shrug:

I'd add:
And mine only.

I'll have to deal with him, but with a smile, of course.

Because I think... ... he does the same too.
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kushamisaru Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah it's cheesy as all get up, but love does that to you ^^;

You have a good point... Do you mind if I maybe use that? Crediting you, of course.

I really like the first line too. When I thought it up I knew I had to write the rest :D

No you don't kiss my ass. And I appreciate the honesty as always :la:
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SilverFickle Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Gosh, sure i wouldn't mind! :happybounce: I'm honored !

You're welcome!!
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dan1117 Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Your welcome and plus i can somehow relate to this i just don't know how yet
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dan1117 Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Well the internet people are right you do have a talent. You did an amazing job on this and this is coming from my heart and soul.
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kushamisaru Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
well shucks, thank you very much :iconblushplz: I'm glad you genuinely think that :D
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nameless-phantom Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013   Writer
I think it's very nice. It accurately portrays most people's feelings toward their parents while growing up.

(And I swear I'm not trying to kiss up, either. I think I found this on the front page.)
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kushamisaru Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! I'm glad you genuinely think so! :D

(ARE YOU SERIOUS. WHEN? WHAT TIMELINE?)
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nameless-phantom Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013   Writer
Well, it was on the Popular 8 hours timeline, but I couldn't find it anymore. ^^;

If I remember correctly, it was within the top 100 though!
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Loulabanana Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I love this, especially the comparison to a superlative. I saw that line and wanted to read the rest. :)
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kushamisaru Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much! I kinda like that line too :)
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Metalfull Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This reminds me of my dad...you know except for the fact i'm not in high school until next year....Anyway I have to show this to my little sister she'll probly love this even more than I do.(even thought I REALY like this)
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kushamisaru Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm glad you like it, and I'm glad you find it so relatable :) Hope your sister enjoys too!
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X12-1992 Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
veyr good and moving
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kushamisaru Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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Steve-C2 Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013
Your instructions to us in commenting were to "mean it with all your heart and soul."

What I see here is someone who sat down to write something for her dad, and "mean it with all her heart and soul." With something like that, I'd let technical issues slide. :)

That said, I do agree with :iconcelvas: - although my real issue lies with the one-word sentence, "naturally" and the double-earned.

As for the notion that it may come across as "he may be a totally average father, but he's MY totally average father," well, I'm not sure there's really a problem with that. He's the best dad to you, and that's really what matters, and frankly, that's what I get out of it.

Cheers. :)
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kushamisaru Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I really did try to write something from the heart and good writing too... but I mean, I'll take that slide :XD:

Ah yes. I'll fix those then.

Well yeah. That sums it up rather nicely, doesn't it? :) Thanks for the feedback! I appreciate it greatly.
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Steve-C2 Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013
Oh, goodness, don't take it to mean I didn't think it was good, because it was! :lol:

If my little girl wrote something like that about me later on, I'd be very pleased. :)
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kushamisaru Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh no, that's not what I'm thinking... well, no more than with any other piece. Always a little bit of doubt, you know? ^^;

Even though I'm a girl, that thought would give me warm fuzzies too :)
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Xxbrokenwristxx Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is an amazing poem for fathers day. I really made me think about how we see the different people in our lives form when we are younger to older. I wish I could see my dad in this way, maybe my opinion will change when I am older. Whoever is talking about you behind there back has no idea what they are saying because I can not find anything wrong with this except for ONE comma mistake I saw int he beginning. Your dad is lucky yo have a kid like you :)
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kushamisaru Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Well thank you very much!

I'm in no position to sound like a wise old owl, but I think your opinions of just about everyone will probably change at some point, usually in a good way with parents :)

Oh, no no, I don't think anyone right now is talking about me behind my back (though if they were, how would I know?). That was just a way of expressing that I really really want honest feedback, even if it's harsh.

Could you please point out the comma mistake? I'm not exactly hip to their rules ^^;
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Xxbrokenwristxx Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah, the commas mistake was "I picture him, looking at the first life he helped create, knowing statistics were against him and fighting them anyway". There should be a comma between "him" and "and". It's the oxford comma. Most people use it, some do not. :)
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kushamisaru Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Okay, I'll go fix that right now. Thanks!
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Xxbrokenwristxx Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
No problem!
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JennyxShawn Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I like it! It describes how I feel about my own father! Great job! :)
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kushamisaru Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! Glad you liked it!
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JennyxShawn Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome! :meow:
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Animationobsessed Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Student General Artist
Love it! Wouldn't change it one bit! :)
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kushamisaru Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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Celvas Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013
I don't know anything about fathers, so I'll stick to the form.

I could point out that you missed a comma inbetween "the most the best," but instead I will tell you that "the strongest" and "the bravest" are very specific terms, while "the most" and "the best" are ominous. The most of...? The best in...? These are headers for groups of adjectives and tell you nothing. Instead try coming up with two more specific adjectives that you, as a child, ascribed to your father. They will make the point stronger.

Good transition from kid to teen, using an already negative term in a positive context to then let it unfold. Change of structure provides for a non-boring narrative. Would kick out the "Naturally." You said it already, just not with that word. There is no need to repeat yourself. Smart daughters usually have smart dads. =p Also it makes for an obstacle in the reading flow. It's like knowing about a rockslide, but seriously, you could have done without that bolder in the middle of the street.

You might want to cut back a bit on the "understand now" part, even if this is where you chose to put special emphasis on. "I really, honestly understand" is just another way of saying "this is genuine understanding." Repetition, no, repetition be evil. Bad mojo.

You got one "earned" too much. I'm telling you because I'm pretty sure you don't want your dad to tell you. Also you're switching to an "us." If you have siblings and do really want to use the us, then go through with it from beginning to end. Either it's you-you or us-you. The whole paragraph kind of creeps me out, because you take responsibility for your hormones. Pretty much every teenager is a hot coal to handle and it would be ponies and rainbows to expect otherwise. Begs the question if your father needs an apology for something so natural people don't even bother to make a lot of internet memes for it. And I don't quite think you need to appreciate your father's efforts in your creation and subsequent birth. These are two things you had no control over. My tuppence worth.

The "dad hurts, laughs, cries" thing is cute. I am not suited to comment on the rest, although it does leave me with an odd feeling. It's a bit weak, you know. Hard to explain. It reads like: "He's a totally average father, but he's MY totally average father."
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kushamisaru Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Christ, I knew I should've posted this a couple days in advance... *cracks knuckles* Well then. I'll see what I can do about all that.

Thank you for your feedback
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Celvas Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013
I'm sorry it couldn't be better.

It doesn't have to be perfect, you know. The only thing it has to accomplish is to come from your heart.
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kushamisaru Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It couldn't? :'(

Well, yeah... I guess that's true. I just wanted to write something really nice for him.
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Celvas Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013
I meant that I am sorry my feedback couldn't be better. Like, "Woah, it's perfect!" You know. Something like that.

Your written gift: As long as it is from you, and as long as you pour your love for him into it, it will be.
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kushamisaru Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, haha! ^^; No that's fine. You gave me exactly what I asked for, and I appreciate that.


Yeah, that's true.
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Konnono Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
kind in return <--- this sounds a bit funny.

Apart from that, it's fine.
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kushamisaru Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'll fix it then.

Thank you!
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SECRET-NINJA-SUPER-M Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013   General Artist
I think it's great the way it is.
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kushamisaru Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much!
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