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Listen,
Every year starts and ends with winter
There's nothing you can do about that

I know it's frustrating
To step out of your house
And see the path you just paved
Covered in snow

But please, be patient

Because the more snow you pile up,
The greener your grass will be
In the spring
In which I am once again culturally insensitive for the sake of making a 'pretty' comparison.
south of the equator every year starts and ends with summer but that wouldn't sound as nice would it
I mean I know there's beauty in every season but come on if you had to choose a season to represent hardship which would you choose?


I guess you could say this is my second submission for suicide awareness week, but really this is just for anyone having a hard time and that needs a lift. Not everyone struggling wants to die. But they're still struggling.

My message to them is keep fighting, because it will get better.

Time isn't just a placebo.

It's a miracle cure.

EDIT: HOLY CRAP.
SO UH I JUST CASUALLY NOTICED THIS IS ON THE FRONT PAGE?
THAT'S THE FIRST TIME THAT'S EVER HAPPENED TO ME WITH MY POETRY.
THANK YOU GUYS SO MUCH
I LOVE YOU.
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AnnaCamilla85 Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2013
I'm having a very difficult time in my life. It's nice to read something so optimistic. Thanks.
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kushamisaru Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Aww, I'm glad it helped you! :D
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LightrayPhotography Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
This is really good. The notion that bad experiences make good one seem better is a very complex idea of contrast in real life and how we perceive things. Sometimes you create some things with great intellectual depth. 
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kushamisaru Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:iconohstopitplz: you're gonna give me a big head with such nice compliments! :iconblushplz:
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CornerstoneOfDreams Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013
I am ashamed to say I did not even know it was suicide awareness week. This is lovely.

You are a writer. You have creative license to say the year begins and ends with winter. You are speaking metaphorically more than anything, and that is where you are trying to get your message across. Even if I lived in Australia, this would have the same impact.

Absolutely lovely, dear. :hug:
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kushamisaru Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Well there's always next year ^^;

Thank you so much for your kind words :) I'm glad you liked it so much!
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poeknowsprose Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013
This is a good and simple poem with a good message. I enjoyed it. Well done :)
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kushamisaru Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! I'm glad you liked it!
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TheAntiAnti-Drug Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
I think it's the perfect comparison.
Winter makes me slow down and think about things. Sometimes I feel like I'm frozen in place and waiting for the heat to come back and melt me.
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kushamisaru Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Well, thank you! I'm glad you think so!

(yeah, that's kind of how I feel too :|)
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ForTheLoveOfSound Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I love this. Wow. I just absolutely love this.
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kushamisaru Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm glad to hear it!
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AnAwkwardBlue Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013
I love the first stanza, I've always thought about how the year starts withered, flourishes, and then withers again.  If you're so worried about cultural insensitivity, maybe you could say that everyday starts and ends with darkness. :shrug:
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kushamisaru Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm kind of hoping that since I acknowledged that I know it's different south of the equator that people will just forgive me >.> but thank you! I do like that metaphor too :D
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AnAwkwardBlue Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013
I bet they will, I know I would.
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SilverFickle Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
The world, or nature, seems like it's dying starting from every autumn, till winter everything is pure white bliss and icy dead but then it is reborn once again during spring. 
It goes to summer then autumn again, it endures and it keeps living even though it keeps dying, and i think that's something everyone should learn ^_^
It gets better when you persevere and keep fighting <3


Really love the last stanza! Like everything is extra worthy if you deal with all that negativity ^_^
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kushamisaru Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
... I hope you know I have to write something about that concept now. You've inspired me. 
Even though this is already a similar concept I still got to get in that idea of the world dying and coming back to life somewhere in some poem in the future. I hope that's okay with you

I like to believe that's what happens :) even if it's just because the person's been through so much that just a little bit of good news makes them happy.
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SilverFickle Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
yeah yeah it's okay xD I had that idea yesterday so i typed it out to share but hey! looks like great minds think alike huh xD nope no sorry i went there *crawls under bed*

Yeah they need that little nudge ^D^ we all need a nudge.
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kushamisaru Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Stop it! You do have a great mind! 
or was that for me because then I agree but then it still wouldn't be thinking alike so let's just both be great okay

*nudges you*
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SilverFickle Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
haha okay great xD we're great ;w;

*nudges back* :huggle:
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Fyres-Descent Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much. :hug: This is beautiful, and even the description makes me feel nice, because not tons of people think that way. Even if we don't think about suicide, we hurt. So, thank you.
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kushamisaru Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Gosh. :iconblushplz:

Thank you for such a kind comment! I'm glad you liked it so much!
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S7alker117 Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Well, while I'm not necessarily in a suicidal mood, I'm going through some emotional low times. Reading this felt really, really good.

Thank you. :hug:
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kushamisaru Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're very welcome! I'm glad this helped you :)
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S7alker117 Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It did. Once again, thank you.

And keep with the good work. :)
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Hidden-Behind-A-Book Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013  Student Writer
Very beautiful and wonderfully written. I love it!
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kushamisaru Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! I'm glad you do :D
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Hidden-Behind-A-Book Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013  Student Writer
You're welcome! :)
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ValerieCFrechmann Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is beautiful. :)  The message inside is wonderful, and I understood it instantly. 
Nice work.
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kushamisaru Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much! I'm glad you liked it!
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Polarisbear12 Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Indeed things do get better. Only if you want it too.
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kushamisaru Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
True, true.
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